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Fun And Games In Iraq! Critiques please...
maxcavsm:
Paris Hilton's going to jail. Ha, ha.
Anyway, thanks again to Tom/Azual over at CAD for getting me my 15 minute shading/highlight lesson via MSN messenger today. Good stuff, and 10x easier than learning how to use Photoshop in general.
There were certainly points where I got a little carried away, but I was excited, what can I say?
maxcavsm:
Well, back to it.
Bending the forum posting rules a little, I posted the actual first comic for my series on several webcomic forums and got the same general advice across the board:
Here's the actual thread:
http://www.cad-forums.com/showthread.php?t=72932
And the general response across all five boards I'm posting on is:
1) WAY too much dialogue. Spread it out. Settle down, tiger.
2) Yes, that "thing" in the 1st panel is a closed eye from the inside.
2) People are suprisingly interested to see what happens next.
So, based on wanting to start out on a good first impression/good footing, I'm probably going to revamp the prologue until I get it to make sense through a first read and tweak some of the drawings a bit. Otherwise, I think it's a hell of a start.
Immediately after posting, I spent another 2-3 hours roughing out the next one, but I got a little carried away when I scanned and tried to ink/color. It got ugly REAL quickly, as it involves actual drawing/coloring, etc. So, I redid the entire thing and started inking/coloring the first panel last night with some tricks Azual taught me (shift + click with brush= straight line FTW).
IT IS NOT DONE. This is a 75% solution here; no text, no highlights, shadows are nowhere near done...but you get the idea. Took bloody forever, but I think you get the idea.
Anyway, also worked on some other scribblings while watching TV with my wife. They always take forever, but it's a nice, relaxing time and it's time I can spend with my wife as opposed to in front of my computer in my dungeon.
Narr:
The redone colored group photo with the shading is actually pretty good.
Let us know once you get a full strip up and running!
Note to self: Check other threads before making self look like a doofus.
maxcavsm:
Woot! Happy three-month-drawing-anniversary!
I'm now working on comic four for my Myspace site, building up an archive before I actually decide to start up a website somewhere. Here's a few stills from comic 3 and 4.
A character sheet (sort of) for Ezra, and a guy on the metro that turned out very nicely.
A still shot of SGT "Hotpants" the recruiter from comic #3. Obviously, not her real name. While I was sitting in a fancy pants salon with my wife getting her haircut, I toook the time, my sketch pad, and a fancy pants modelling magazine to do the legs on the woman and get them to look convincing and sexy. The rest I thunk out on my own, and I think the results work:
And finally, Mac getting that first haircut at Ft. Benning; was trying to fill up a panel and this came to my head on the trip into work this morning, and then sketched it out on the way home. A panel from comic #4.
maxcavsm:
Aways nice to walk away for a few days and see what compliments I can catch in the ol' lint trap at the forums. I really appreciate all the "asspats" as it were. It's compliments that keep me going; I always sit down to draw something thinking, "This is going to look like crap", and 30-45 minutes later, I look at it and marvel that it all works out the way it does.
Couldn't do much over the holiday weekend with the parents in town, but the fourth comic is posted at my Myspace site in my sig at the bottom if you're interested in some finished product.
Right now, it's at about an update a week with my life and work schedule...what can you do?
Thanks again all. I'll post here with some more stuff soon (I hope).
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