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maxcavsm:
I was going to put this in my sketchbook thread, but I wanted this to stand out, because I really wanted to hear one way or the other with some critique. Had a lot of little photoshop BS problems and hangups, but after just crashing through it, I came up with this for my prologue page.

And no, the parts in black and white aren't just my being lazy...they're for dramatic effect...(SUUUURE they are....)

Anyway, here we go.

Emaline:
I think it'd be interesting with the hand and blood in black and white as well. Overall, it looks nice.

I'd read more. I'd like to know more of whats going on.

maxcavsm:
Okay, based on guidence, here's the changes.  Added a little shadow/backlighting to the people, figuring the light source would be overhead.



Only took an hour or so to fix everything, which for me is setting a land speed record for dialogue bubbles and playing with Photoshop Elements.

Shishio:
I think the second version of your page is much better than the first.  No offesne, but the internal monologue in the first version is way to cliche.

maxcavsm:
Bad news then, Mac's going to be doing a litte monologuing/exposition to get things up to speed.

But, I do appreciate the feedback.  I am wondering how to exactly get around all of the history and get the boys into the middle of Iraq without devoting hundreds of comics to build it up.

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