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Teh Geek Lord:




They are kinda rough right now, but I will touch them up when my tablet arrives ( a 9 x 12 intuos).

These are my first two attempts at a whole-page comic.  A while back I played around with some home-made srprites and made a shitty (albeit funny) comic in MS paint a few years back.

These are my first two in my foray back into comics and story telling.

I plan on making this a series (I have a semi-finished plot and ideas to continue it along) and will upload them into my DA account. 

I'm posting this here so I can get some CC on them and pointers and other ideas to help me along in making a better comic. 

(Also if you have a hatred of the so-called "furries" leave that for a PM as that would not be CONSTRUCTIVE criticism)

est:
I think that you are perhaps spelling things out a little too much.  When you're writing a book you have to explain what's going on because you have no pictures.  When you're drawing a comic sometimes it's best to leave the pictures to tell the story themselves, for atmospheric reasons.

KickThatBathProf:

--- Quote ---To easy!
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 :?

That aside, I agree with what est said.  Anything you can explain well by using pictures will make the description that much more vivid.  Also, this might be a matter of my personal preferences, but the guards really don't look guard-like in just a T-shirt and pants.  I understand that it might just be because it's sort of a rough edit, but it looked out of place as compared to the looks of Sherman and whatever Bounty-hunter-dude's name is.

Teh Geek Lord:

--- Quote from: KickThatBathProf on 26 Apr 2008, 19:31 ---
--- Quote ---To easy!
--- End quote ---

 :?

That aside, I agree with what est said.  Anything you can explain well by using pictures will make the description that much more vivid.  Also, this might be a matter of my personal preferences, but the guards really don't look guard-like in just a T-shirt and pants.  I understand that it might just be because it's sort of a rough edit, but it looked out of place as compared to the looks of Sherman and whatever Bounty-hunter-dude's name is.

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no problem, I'm going to cut back on words in the comic then.  Yes, they are rough, will be finished with a tablet later on.  I'll find something suitable for the gaurds to don when I finalize them.

Thanks for the comments and suggestions, they will be used.


--- Quote from: est on 26 Apr 2008, 18:09 ---
Cutting back on words with and prose within the comic!  Thanks, est!
I think that you are perhaps spelling things out a little too much.  When you're writing a book you have to explain what's going on because you have no pictures.  When you're drawing a comic sometimes it's best to leave the pictures to tell the story themselves, for atmospheric reasons.

--- End quote ---

tomselleck69:
Use a ruler or a straight edge when making straight lines.

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