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fredhate:
Ditto to everything that Sideways said.

I really like the tone of the comic. It's pretty depressing, but in a good way.

I would have gone this way:

Panel 1 and 2 as you have them.
Panel 3: End with "Could you do something about the wattage of the lighting in the halls?"
Panel 4: The rest of his note. Also, you don't need them to point out that he's crazy. It's like telling a joke and then using an extra panel to say "Here's why this situation is funny."

I wouldn't cut to a text only panel, as it seems like a cop out. Even though it's a note, you can still make it more interesting by perhaps having one of the characters reading it.

Please rethink the transparent word bubbles. It makes it harder to read as the background artwork tends to interfere.

Lastly, like Sideways said, mix it up a little. Having the same art in each panel is boring.

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