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Title: Critique me please
Post by: DinosGoLauRAWR on 11 Mar 2008, 15:37
I am a budding digital artist who has never taken art classes, I'd like to know what you all think of my work.
here is a selection of my better art:
(http://fc03.deviantart.com/fs27/f/2008/071/3/5/35f19ac6ae5de3aa.jpg)
(http://fc03.deviantart.com/fs25/f/2008/067/f/b/the_tree_on_the_hill__by_Nowherexbutxhere.jpg)
(http://fc01.deviantart.com/fs29/f/2008/054/c/e/Roxanne__by_Nowherexbutxhere.jpg)
(http://fc02.deviantart.com/fs29/f/2008/048/f/9/Sakura_trees__by_Nowherexbutxhere.jpg)
(http://fc03.deviantart.com/fs26/f/2008/033/2/4/Kimberly__by_Nowherexbutxhere.jpg[img]
[img]http://fc04.deviantart.com/fs24/f/2007/349/f/6/f6488df56c7c5aed.jpg)
(http://fc02.deviantart.com/fs23/i/2007/316/6/a/Lonely_star__by_Nowherexbutxhere.jpg)
(http://fc06.deviantart.com/fs24/f/2007/315/9/1/Mimi_by_Nowherexbutxhere.jpg)
(http://fc02.deviantart.com/fs29/f/2008/104/8/0/The_woes_of_Miss_Doe__by_Nowherexbutxhere.jpg)
(http://fc07.deviantart.com/fs25/i/2008/135/9/8/Elf__by_Nowherexbutxhere.jpg)
(http://fc07.deviantart.com/fs26/f/2008/143/b/e/The_Faun__by_Nowherexbutxhere.jpg)
(http://fc02.deviantart.com/fs15/f/2007/092/0/7/Wolf__s_Rain___Blue_by_Nowherexbutxhere.jpg)

 the last and third to last were done with a photo base reference

Title: Re: Critique me please
Post by: Z2. on 11 Mar 2008, 17:14
I like the pseudo-Impressionist styling in #2, try a few themes around that.

I took Art as a subject for 5 years, and I struggle to get what I see down on paper, some people can transfer what they see relatively easily (or so I have heard), others not so, but in all cases a lot of trial and error, and practise is required to perfect your style.
Title: Re: Critique me please
Post by: Liz on 11 Mar 2008, 17:52
I really like them all, actually. I think number one would look great on a t-shirt or tote bag.
Title: Re: Critique me please
Post by: Cam on 12 Mar 2008, 08:36
2, 4: very nice. You seem to have a good grasp on a that style and it works really well.

1: Using a scatter brush with no opacity or even rotation changes looks really bad.  The line work on the three looks great, but the stars just don't compliment it at all.

3: Looks good overall.  It seems like proportions could be slightly tweaked, but considering I still, constantly, get my ass kicked by human proportions, take that with a grain of salt.  Over all, very good

5:  The character looks great, but the background doesn't work with her.

I threw together something since I had a few minutes before work.  Obviously, the buildings are horrible and main star are terrible, but you can see how adding a little opacity and size jitter makes the stars look a lot better.  Also, I threw together a custom brush for the stars so it wasn't the horrible stock one.  They can really make your work look a lot better and take very little time to create.  http://www.uwec.edu/Help/PhotoshopCS3/brushes-cust.htm

Overall, it is good and shows a lot of potential.

(http://www.bankholdup.com/crit.jpg)
Title: Re: Critique me please
Post by: ThePQ4 on 12 Mar 2008, 10:34
Actually, that is what I liked about the last one. She doesn't fit in --she looks dark and awkward in a city of lights. I think it's very reflective...

I liked the others too, but it's a toss up between the first one and the last one as my favorite. The 1st would make a really great shirt, like Misconception said!
Title: Re: Critique me please
Post by: jeph on 12 Mar 2008, 10:46
The stars all look pretty lazy when contrasted with the hand-drawn stuff.

The girl in profile's eye should be narrower.
Title: Re: Critique me please
Post by: Katherine on 12 Mar 2008, 11:12
I really like the pink trees one.  I would hang it on my wall.
Title: Re: Critique me please
Post by: DinosGoLauRAWR on 12 Mar 2008, 12:44
The stars all look pretty lazy when contrasted with the hand-drawn stuff.

The girl in profile's eye should be narrower.
thanks jeph for stopping to comment, any good points that you see?
Title: Re: Critique me please
Post by: jeph on 12 Mar 2008, 23:01
The tree in the first picture looks pretty good, I like the wood grain effect, but you gotta remember you will only get those whorls in the wood grain where a branch is supposed to be. So the tree just looks like it's been pruned and sanded down, which is probably not what you are going for.

Other than that, I would say you have the basics down but you need to work more on your fundamentals, ie drawing and painting from life, as well as learning crafty photoshop tricks to make your stuff not look like it was done in photoshop.*

*these are also things I really need to do.
Title: Re: Critique me please
Post by: Spluff on 13 Mar 2008, 00:51
Try working at a larger size and spending more time on your works, really work hard on them.
Title: Re: Critique me please
Post by: tomselleck69 on 13 Mar 2008, 01:48
Some things!


girl in green jacket:
-Her jaw line is too long. When the head is viewed in profile, the ear is closer to the center than it is to the back of the head. If the ear is drawn that far back, it kind of gives the impression that the back of her head is missing.

-Shortening the jaw line will emphasize a few other problems on the face. The shape of the eye is too oblong. Take in the left side a little bit. Additionally, the angle of the chin is too severe, and the underside of the nose is not severe enough. (Not the best examples---but the line of the profile is closer to "}" than it is to ">").

-I would try doing the jacket with a single, solid outline, rather than many sketchy ones. Striving towards a more economic use of your line is a good thing, and using a single line will put pressure on you to give concrete definition to things that you're only approximating with the sketchy lines. That said, sketchy lines definitely have their place, but my personal preference is to not have them in the final product.

-Finally, perhaps most importantly---don't shy away from drawing hands! they can be a lot of fun when you get the hang of them.


girl in purple:
-needs shoulders!
-eyes too far apart
-figuring out a way to create the background elements without resorting to a pre-made brush is the way to go here. the lights and stars are way too loud.


Also: what Jeph said. Boo crafty photoshop tricks! Hooray drawing from life!


edit: just re-read this and have to emphasize that I do not mean to come off like a jerk here.
Title: Re: Critique me please
Post by: Teh Geek Lord on 14 Mar 2008, 18:46
I find them all very nicely done.  Your have an ability with several different styles, and they all are good.  Number two, I think, has the most potential for a style to pursue, as you did the second one perfectly. 

The last one also has a ton of potential, aw hell, what am I saying, they ALL have potential. 

Listen to Jeph on the eyes being narrower, but other than that I can't find anything to critique. 

good work, oh, and one more thing.  Do you have a Deviant art page?
Title: Re: Critique me please
Post by: DinosGoLauRAWR on 14 Mar 2008, 22:33
yes the link is in my siggy :)
Title: Re: Critique me please
Post by: recklessftw on 20 Mar 2008, 11:52
I freakin love #3, the girl in the green coat. Love it.
Title: Re: Critique me please
Post by: DinosGoLauRAWR on 21 Mar 2008, 21:16
Shes a character from my novel I'm writing, I can link you to it if you wish.
Title: Re: Critique me please
Post by: Seigea on 08 May 2008, 13:10
personally, I like all 4 pieces. they don't go together really, but they are each very good for someone without training. i think that no.1 is exceptional. maybe lose the stars and replace them with leaves or fireflys. something like that. or if you want to keep the stars, make them part of the tree like they're growing from it.
i don't know, it's your vision.
i love the style of no.2 very good. a perfect piece for the backdrop of a flash-back or as a painting on a wall or easel
no. 3 is good. it looks like you obviously have a style of your own and that's cool, but the anatomy compared to a real woman is a bit off kilter. still, like i said, your vision
no.4 is interesting. kind of like its the world versus our girl there. maybe some back story puts her at unease about this city. don't hesitate to draw shoulders. everyone has them. i used to have a huge problem drawing women. but they're as easy to draw as men. just a smaller frame with a couple more bends.
still, i like all of it. keep working towards your style. never stop drawing. ^_^
Title: Re: Critique me please
Post by: Cartilage Head on 17 May 2008, 16:28
I'm no artist but I think those drawings are really great.
Title: Re: Critique me please
Post by: emomanisme on 17 May 2008, 19:18
the first one is great so is the second the third is good but what are those lines on the side of her head?the fourth is good and the character in the last is great (I dont like teh coat but thats a problem with her fashion not your drawing) but the background... needs work
 :-D
Title: Re: Critique me please
Post by: Seigea on 17 May 2008, 20:21
the first one is great so is the second the third is good but what are those lines on the side of her head?
they're barrets. you know, like hair clips
Title: Re: Critique me please
Post by: emomanisme on 18 May 2008, 14:39
oh. yeah, huh now i feels stupid :oops:
Title: Re: Critique me please
Post by: sean on 18 May 2008, 14:44
I would buy a print of the pink tree (cherry blossoms?) picture. It's damn good.
Title: Re: Critique me please
Post by: Blue Kitty on 18 May 2008, 19:37
Like Cartilage Head said about himself I am not an artist, but I still find these fantastic.  One thing though, the stars did some out of place to me in that last one.
Title: Re: Critique me please
Post by: Lines on 18 May 2008, 21:14
The girl in the green jacket: The way you've drawn her head puts her ear on the back of her head. Ears are actually sort of in between the eye and the back of the head. If you're interested in drawing people, just draw more people, even if it's with a pencil and paper. The best way to get better is just to draw more.
Title: Re: Critique me please
Post by: Seigea on 19 May 2008, 09:13
Very true, very true. I tend to draw the characters of my comic with their ears towards the back of their heads, so i guess i didn't notice lol
Title: Re: Critique me please
Post by: kaetaa on 24 Jun 2008, 19:50
I like some, and others look kind of tacky in my eyes, mostly the 2nd one, and the one with the trees and all the pinkness.

If you gave it some practice and try to draw more from real life (like jeph said) you will definitely see a big different in the finished product.

Nice job =]
Title: Re: Critique me please
Post by: Neskah on 26 Jun 2008, 15:20
I think they're awesome. Obviously as you develop your style will tighten more... but i still enjoy them as they are.

I also liked Cams alteration.

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Title: Re: Critique me please
Post by: DinosGoLauRAWR on 29 Jun 2008, 21:15
thank you all, I'm going to add more art :D
Title: Re: Critique me please
Post by: nursethalia on 28 Jul 2008, 12:21
Put that first one on a postcard or tshirt or tote or something, because I LOVE it! :D