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Fun Stuff => MAKE => Topic started by: falconire on 29 Oct 2008, 15:30
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Hey, I was wondering if I could get some feedback on my comic - don't worry, it's not a sprite or about two chaps hanging out with their vgs.
www.supernaturalspresents.com
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Well, normally I'd say you shouldn't start your own thread for plugging a comic, but the artwork on yours is absolutely astoundingly good. the writing is a little, well, it needs some work we'll say. Good story, but there's a couple typos, and some grammar issues, and you could probably stand to rethink the order you're presenting the story. All that said whoever drew this (not sure which of the pair you are) has got the hand of a professional.
Also, take this with a grain of salt, everyone's a critic, and maybe I'm the only one who'd be confused somewhat by the writing. I'm only an amateur writer who's never written much of anything to talk about, so who gives a fuck what I say Eh? Four :-D :-D :-D :-D out of five.
Edit: I'm also reading Lead Pain because of the review, Rockin' out man.
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I appreciate the critique. Any chance of you pointing out the spelling and grammar you noticed? I've gone through it a few times so I must have missed a few things.
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Well, in the first comic you use the word GUILDE where I think you mean to say GUIDE. Unless guilde is a Native American term that wikipedia has failed in finding for me. and then in comic #9 the wife says "You're nothing but a weed him, Leander!" Which again I could be wrong if its some sort of saying.
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Thanks for pointing those out, both minor mistakes, but both needing to be altered.
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Hey, my comic is now in the middle of the second story, 46 pages long (counting the two covers). Wouldn't mind a review of what people think of the new story so far.