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Title: It's a Duck! a bit of a 'toonish logo up for critiquing
Post by: fenmere on 12 Oct 2005, 14:01

Just wondering if maybe someone here can help me see flaws in this:

http://pics.livejournal.com/fenmere/pic/0003shph

It's a very early sketch of a logo for my favorite ice cream shop.  The owner and I will discuss ways to make it more logo-y, such as maybe by putting a great big "M" on his apron.  And I will be redrawing him on larger paper to clean him up.  Right now, I'm trying to figure out how to make him feel even duckier.

Thanks!

Title: It's a Duck! a bit of a 'toonish logo up for critiquing
Post by: Jarne on 12 Oct 2005, 14:13

The body looks a bit like a chickens.

Title: It's a Duck! a bit of a 'toonish logo up for critiquing
Post by: Vlishgnath on 12 Oct 2005, 14:15

Shop name, or "M" as you say on the apron would be a stellar idea.  Also, I think you did a fab job on the bill.  Only real suggestion I have is the left foot.  It seems a smidge off in comparison.  And possibly some more definition on the waist?  More feather lines or something.

<---- not an artist

Title: It's a Duck! a bit of a 'toonish logo up for critiquing
Post by: Rone on 12 Oct 2005, 14:18

More duckier, you say?

Well, on scales of duckness, I'd say the head looks just fine.  It goes a little awry for me on the body, tho.  For some reason the shape looks a little more akin to a chicken, not a duck.  Change the tail feathers perhaps?  Or maybe go for more brown or grey?  That might make the image too dull in color tho...

Meh, it looks just fine for a logo.  Probably just leave it as is.  It's a cheery, welcoming image, which is just what you want in that kind of thing.

And dammit, now I really want to eat some ice cream.

Title: It's a Duck! a bit of a 'toonish logo up for critiquing
Post by: fenmere on 12 Oct 2005, 14:27

Thanks guys!  You're confirming a number of my thoughts.  I'll post a revision shortly today.

Title: It's a Duck! a bit of a 'toonish logo up for critiquing
Post by: Gryff on 12 Oct 2005, 20:16

If it's a logo maybe you should simplify it a little and smooth out the linework. The simpler the better when it comes to logos.

Title: It's a Duck! a bit of a 'toonish logo up for critiquing
Post by: Se7en on 13 Oct 2005, 02:56

I'd exagerate the "duck" features. Feet, tail, and bill. Just make em all a bit bigger.

Title: It's a Duck! a bit of a 'toonish logo up for critiquing
Post by: Warmada on 26 Oct 2005, 13:54

Quote from: Se7en

I'd exagerate the "duck" features. Feet, tail, and bill. Just make em all a bit bigger.

If there is a reason for the duck logo (such as the name being McDucky's), then Thats a very good idea. Even if it isn't, duckification is a good idea.

Very nice, and with work, it'll be a good logo.

Title: It's a Duck! a bit of a 'toonish logo up for critiquing
Post by: orphæus on 27 Oct 2005, 21:48

In addition to what's been said (especially se7en's comment; exaggeration wins):

- don't color-match the apron to the head; I spent a while trying to figure out why his 'gut' was pointy like that
- accentuate the shoulder strap more; or get rid of the new color for the chest feathers, same reason
- don't foreshorten the feet anywhere near that much
- rework where the feathers end (tuft on head, 'hands' and tail) so they're not as spaced out
- scrap the nub where his body is in front of the arm holding the ice cream cone; arms have a top and a bottom