I'd proof it for you, but with your weird formatting, I don't know if I'd be 'correcting' anything intentional.
I suggest you proof it yourself, and explain to me what you're trying to say, then I shall tell you what I think you did right and/or wrong, because I can say a LOT of things about this in it's current state and with my current interpretation. I think a lot of it is probably too personal and self referential to make sense, is that right?
it certainly makes you look very human!
What is it?