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Tokzic

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Poetry.
« on: 03 Nov 2007, 18:26 »

Normally I don't write too much of it, but lately is an exception. As such, here is some poetry. Give me any criticism you've got.

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(Formatting on this one is as close as I can get it without making it an image. Also, it is an extreme mindfuck.)
 
Gesundheit
 
It can start from anything
or nothing at all
But once the fuse is ignited,
It cannot be put out
by even the most airtight press.
 
It's over in an instant,
And
yet
the
buildup
slows
everything
like
a dam
lowered into a dam a stream of time.
 
Then,
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
unexpectedly,
 
 
 
 
 
 
even though you had the feeling
it would happen all along,
you feel the silence
remorselessly bludgeoned to
 
DEATH

, then,

There is the horrible shapeless mess
that lingers for a lifetime
or what's left of them.
 
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transfUsion

today,
i Stole
a glancE at my veiNs.
being roBbed
by plastic,
belOngings stored
in gLass bags.
never to be seen again.
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Re: Poetry.
« Reply #1 on: 05 Nov 2007, 15:23 »

I call this "Poem About That One Thing That Happened That One Time" and it is a true story. I've actually posted this before but it's the only poem i've ever written.

One afternoon
on the fly
judging strangers,
Pat and I.
We saw a black man
walk on by.
Minutes later,
to our surprise
we traveled backwards
through space and time.
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