I just read the XKCD strip. You need to put more of that kind of humor here. Like an Americanized stew with hungarian roots, it was a mixture. A mixture of thought provoking topics and lines that makes you stop and think again, and again, and again, ... Finally you give up and let the 3rd voice in your head win.
BTW: so now that Dora is out of the way, I wonder what Faye is thinking. Something tells me we'll have an idea pretty soon. That reminds me, is Faye supposed to be the "reflector" in the storyline that your audience relates to?
