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Voting closed: 17 Jul 2005, 22:14

[Patatat]

Oh I guess we say we're growing up / we're growin up and long gone are the days / where you were the doctor and I was the patient / oh simon is growin up too, and we don't do what he says anymore / Oh the red lights have a different meaning, they grew up too / Oh and we're growing up so fast, we aren't the same as we used to be / Growing up, up, up, and apart Oh yeah / We're growin up, up, up, and apart /

You looked me dead in the eye, and said  / oh Grow up Grow Up You aren't a child anymore / and I replied so quickly / oh I already did and I ain't stoppin and neither are you / We're growing up, up, and apart darlin' / We've watched many winters come and go / Making new friends in them and watching them disapear in the summer / Oh darlin' we're growin up, up, up, and apart/

Oh I guess you can say we're growin up / oh up up and apart yeah / Long gone are the days when we were young / We're growin up yeah / Yeah / Oh Yeah/ We're growin up, up, up, and apart / I don't even recognize you any more, we've grown up so much apart /


Its a song about, two kids, a boy and a girl who grow up togheter. Then when high-school comes, they seperate, and then during graduation they become friends again, and realize how much they've grown apart.

I plan on putting more into it, to help describe that a bit more.

Bonus Points, if you can guess what I am talking about in the first part of the song.

[sp2]

Um.  You know, if you record it and post a link, you'd get better responses.  I've heard plenty of shit songs with good lyrics and plenty of good songs with shit lyrics.  It's all in the presentation.

That said, I'm not totally inspired by your lyrics, but I won't make any judgements 'til I actually hear it in practice.  I mean, I've cranked out some really cheesy lyrics and made them work in the past, so I won't judge.  Too much.

[Valrus]

First verse: Kids' games. In order: Playing doctor; Simon Says; Red Light, Green Light.

Man, that was a punctuation bonanza.

[KharBevNor]

Loss of innocence, blah blah.

You're going to have to work a pretty nice rhythm and squeeze and draw some syllables to get that to scan. One reason to write lyrics, of course.

[heretic]

i shall reserve judgement until there is music, as the lyrics aren't interesting/complex enough to merit/demerit the song. it would have to be in the voice as there isn't much specific here. my advice; specify, talk about a certain time, give significant particulars. give specific emotions. the devil's in the details, and so is the heart

(puke all over my shoes for my last line)

[ASturge]

The lyrics were a bit meh

It's all in the delivery of course.

[KharBevNor]

Also, does it have a rhyming scheme at all?

[Patatat]

Listen to Cat Stevens-I wish, I wish


thats basically it, the chords, and sound change of course.

[heretic]

rhyme scheme can be loose, as long as you put a pattern of inflection to simulate rhyme


addendum: if we did have a song we wanted to share, what would be the easiest/free way to do that

[sp2]

Listen to Cat Stevens-I wish, I wish


thats basically it, the chords, and sound change of course.

Just record it, don't say "it's basically like this song but different."

[Patatat]

Khar I'd put it up on www.purevolume.com or www.myspace.com its free, and it seems you can put four songs on there.

[ASturge]

I use Purevolume

[KharBevNor]

I use Soundclick. UNLIMITED SONGS OMG. Well, as long as you only use 128 kbps and each is under 10 meg. But who's complaining? Long high quality songs are what you have albums for.

[heretic]

sweet, thanks all